A deleted bit of a scene from Chapter 6 of ‘Semiosis’

This digression appeared in an early version of the final chapter of Semiosis. It illustrates an ongoing difficulty on Pax and the rights its Constitution grants children. This little bit (in blue) from the final chapter about Bartholomew was cut because the book was getting too long, but I enjoyed writing it, and it might amuse you. A team including Bartholomew is deciding how to cut down the orange trees.

“Fire,” Erasmus said. “Not a bad idea, and I like the sentiment. The thing is, the fire would hurt other trees, like that ponytail over there next to the oranges, those pines, even these friendly little palms. No, wouldn’t be right. Good thinking, though.”

People nodded. It wouldn’t be the Pax way.

Piotr stood next to me. The downy hairs on his upper lip had darkened in the last year. He had loved Lucille and he would have been blind not to, the only grown woman in Generation 7. She had been his future, and she died before his eyes, and his heart broke. Could it heal, or could he replace it? If I talked about Bess, would he understand?

“Did you paint your face green to be like Lucille’s?” I asked.

He looked away, fumbling with something in his pockets. “No.” Then, “Yes,” in a louder but not stronger voice on the edge of a squeak.

“That’s a nice gesture,” I said. He nodded and tried to smile and failed utterly.

Maybe we could have saved Lucille. Did he need to know that? Cedar had refused to act, but then Pacifists arrived, fought and almost won. Almost. If the fighting had started a minute earlier, maybe. … No. The orphans already had the acetone, they already had a plan to burn the women to distract us.

But Cedar hadn’t known that. Could I forgive her? Would that be good for Pax? Would that be just?

Piotr was suddenly hugging me. “Take care of yourself,” he said, as if I were the one needing care. He turned and left down a path, whistling in something like Glassmade, and two Glassmaker majors followed him.

We adults fetched ladders and got to work, one tree at a time. I held the ladder for Fabio’s father, trying to hold it steady, but he chopped wildly, long swings with more force than precision, almost knocking himself off the ladder, though he didn’t seem to notice. He couldn’t notice. He was attacking in his own private battle, and how could I not sympathize for the loss of a son? Tears or sweat filled the fine lines around his eyes. I kept my feet planted firm, my eyes on his swinging arm to know when to tense, listening to the rhythm of seven other axes and the crunch and crackle of live wood yielding to steady assault, and to sniffs and sobs and relentless progress, making way for good trees.